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In your abstract, you do an excellent job of telling me about the aims of grid computing, and what your study aims to achieve. I'm sure that if you can achieve your objectives this would be a really good outcome, but in some sense (because the theme of the module is EM rather than grid computing!) you'll need to focus on a message that's more directed towards the role that EM can (or possibly can potentially but perhaps can't very effectively as yet) play in assisting the solution. As of now, your abstract identifies some technical issues ('passing and assignment of pre-defined, parametrised [this used to be correct usage for parameter-ised] tasks'). As I read on into the model description, I find that you have included in there other ideas relating to overall objectives (educational function served by visualisation etc). In the final paper, you'll need to gather these ideas into the abstract itself.

Good to bear in mind that you can put the emphasis on feasibility / 'requirements' modelling issues if you prefer. EM would be a good way to look into alternative ways in which visualisations could be constructed for instance, and it might be worth considering developing a special-purpose notation that is domain-specific to support some aspects of the modelling. Cooperation with one of the other students doing a Grid related project might also be possible, provided there's no risk of plagiarism.